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[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

Title: doesnt have one yet, suggest please?
Pairing: Dom/Orlando
Rating: as of now, R for language and ethnic slurs. If its liked it may become Nc-17 O_o
Warnings: AU, takes place in WWII, there i use some derrogatory terms to refer to the jews taht are the point of view of NAZIS. I DO NOT IN ANYWAY AGREE WITH WWII OR ANYTHING THAT HAPPENED TO THE JEWS OR ANYTHING THEY WERE CALLED. SO NO. HATE. MAIL. THANK YOU!
Author: Me, billylovesdom@hotmail.com
Summary: Orlando is a Greek whos wife was killed when asking for food for their four-year-old daughter. Dominic is a German officer occupying Greece. He doesn't agree with the war, however, in order to protect his family he's had to be in the army and do everything he was told, thus, getitng him advanced in rank. This is just a little intro, i wont write more if people don't like it. tell me what you think


Orlando sat down on his bed, pulling his four-year-old daughter into his arms. He stared past her, refusing to look at her. Her mother was dead and who does he blame? The fucking Germans of course. They killed her. And for what purpose? Because she wanted food for their daughter. He stroked her brown curls and hugged her. “Daddy?”

He closed his eyes. “What is it honey?”

“Where’s mommy?”

He bit his lip hard and kissed her softly on the forehead. “Mommy’s in heaven. She’s with the angels and with God now.”

“Why isn’t she coming home?”

Orlando sighed. He couldn’t do this. Not with this beautiful blue-eyed piece of heaven, not with her, he couldn’t do it. “Because God wants her. God thinks that it would be better if she was with him and we have to respect that.”

She sniffed and he immediately wiped the tears away from her eyes. “But I want my mommy!”

“I know…I know…”

He clung to her, stroking her hair and kissing her forehead.

(---)

Dominic growled at the morons before him. “She was asking for food!” He barked in German. “What were you morons thinking?”

They all avoided eye contact with him. He growled out in German again, “I can’t believe you two opened fire upon an unarmed person, not to mention a woman!! She needed food, she was asking for something we would have gladly given her.”

One of the officers finally spoke up. “She was just Greek scum, sir.”

Dominic slapped him. “Scum? Just Greek scum? She was a fucking human being, and you will not kill anyone unless they fire upon us or are planning an attack of sorts. You know we give them food if they need it. We’re not here to kill Greeks!”

“Just the dirty Kikes right?”

Dominic growled. “Out of my office. And if you two fire on another unarmed citizen who’s just asking for food or water or some other supply that we can give them, I’ll line you two up execution style.”

The two men left Monaghans’ office in foul moods. Dominic sat back in his chair and rubbed his face with his hands. How had he gotten here? Why was he here? Why was he so far from Berlin and having to deal with this? What was Hitler doing?

Dominic felt that by all means he shouldn’t be a ranking officer. He didn’t even want to be a peon in this war. If he could choose he would gladly, by all means, be in Auschwitz with the Jews or any other work (death) camp. But his family had been put under the chopping block if he so much as said he disagreed with what Hitler was doing. And he knew that they’d do it. They’d fucking do it. He had to protect his family.

He lit up a cigarette and looked around his office. So that was that. He had lied to protect his family, done everything asked of him so to protect them and ended up an officer in bloody Greece. Hopefully the Allies would break this down, would take out the Axis powers and he could go back to Berlin, rebuild…

But no, that wouldn’t happen. He had been behind the rounding up of hundreds of Jews, was behind the murder of several Greeks and he would be held responsible. He growled and stubbed out his cigarette, stood and grabbed his jacket and hat.

Comments

[honeysuckle83.livejournal.com]

Why only German Nazis? You are aware that Nazis don't exclusively live in Germany. They are spread all over the world.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

okay lets not be anal. good god.

[honeysuckle83.livejournal.com]

Thanks for changing it. I'm sorry and don't get my wrong, but you really hit a nerve there.

[seraphinhunter.livejournal.com]

apparently germans are only able to 'growl' their language.
i am pretty honest here: this fic sucks ass. why the fuck should dom want to be in auschwitz?
do us all the favour and delete this fic. writing about wwII is just too awkward.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

Dominic feels he should be in Auschwitz because hes behind the deaths of hundreds of jews. did you NOT get that? Dominic feels guilty for what hes done, he hates the fact that the nazis and gestapo kill thousands with out thinking and he cant stop it.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

oh btw, you didnt have to be so rude and brash about it. you could have just said "yeah, i dont really like this fic"

way to be a bitch

[seraphinhunter.livejournal.com]

i am just honest.
i don´t like your writing-style, and i think you have to be a very good writer to write an au-fic about wwII. you failed.
and i am rude and brash, because i am sick of all the new writers who can´t even spell.

btw, i am from germany, and i think i know far more about wwII than you. i know what it´s like to actually stand in buildings of 'auschwitz' and try to understand what happened 50 years ago.

[pipsqueaked.livejournal.com]

Now was that REALLY necessary?

Lacy, hun, I liked it. Alot. And I'm being honest here, not crude and harsh. It's different, and that's why I like it.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

i guess this will be something i'll keep in my LJ :-\ meh...

[pipsqueaked.livejournal.com]

Keep it here. Some people won't be rude, and will appreciate it.

[kitapita.livejournal.com]

Good Grief, people! Touchy much? God. She's touching on sensitive subjects, yes. That doesn't entitle you to jump down her throat. She put disclaimers about it in the intro. If you had problems with those things she put a disclaimer about...DON'T FUCKING READ IT. What are you, 12? Grow up.

Lacy...I already told you how I felt.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

yes you did and i appreciate it greatly.

this is part of the reason i was so scared to start this fic because of the subject matter. because its about horrible things that ACTUALLY happened. but i mean, people could be nice about it...couldn't they?

[ginique.livejournal.com]

Okay, not to step on toes or anything, but you guys are being ridiculous. First of all, she CLEARLY put a disclaimer before the story. If you think a story about WWII is too thick for you to stomach, then you shouldn't have read PAST that disclaimer. Simple as that.

Second, constructive criticism is your friend. If you didn't care for the story, fine, but "this fic sucks ass" is not only childish and immature, but it's rude.

Third, this is just the beginning of the story. You don't even know enough about the plot to condemn it the way you are. Like I said before, if you don't want to read it, fine, but personally, I think it's a great way to step outside of the box and write about something from a different angle.

Just because YOU don't like it doesn't mean that it should be deleted from the community and banned so nobody else can read it.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

heh, my thoughts exactly. why am i not coherant when i get angry? LOL

[chuckjd.livejournal.com]

I couldn't have said it any better than that. Thank you for taking the words out of my mouth and making them coherent.

[erisedraine.livejournal.com]

I liked it, AU's are interesting, especially historic ones (*hugs History*). I don't think you mean he was only growling because he was speaking German, I think you meant to show exactly what tone of voice he was using. I'd be interested to see how Orlando continues dealing with the loss of his wife and his inquisitive daughter and whether or not Dom will continue to beat himself for the actions that are causing him so much grief.

Keep the story, screw the haters. *GROWLS*

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

yeah, he was mad it was tone, it wasnt becuase he was speaking german O_o i still dont get why she was mad about that.

i'm glad you like it, i wont write for a few days on this, gotta do some Rent Boy, requests and like...twenty six hours

[erisedraine.livejournal.com]

:O Yes, work on Rent Boy!!!

[throwsrocks.livejournal.com]

I enjoyed it. People need to calm down and stop getting upset, and as someone previously stated, you should have read the disclaimer. and if you didnt like that, you shouldnt have read it, and you do you have no right to critize. Err.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

heh thanks love :D

[grizelda.livejournal.com]

I think 'nuff has been said about the fact that people shouldn't get so worked up about a story with a sensitive subject. So I'll just stick to saying that this is a good fic, because it's different than most I've read. So please, do write on!

As for the title: I don't have many ideas as for now.. Through love and war?

:|:|

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

i acctually just finished writing up the 2nd part. its over at the d'orli community...

here (http://www.livejournal.com/community/dorli/35606.html?#cutid1)

i happen to haev fallen in love with the young girl. and i titled it "Conflicts of the Unloved"

[timpsonsgirl.livejournal.com]

In comparison to what other people said about this fic I actually thought it was really good. Considering you picked such a well known peice of history I think you were succesful in turning it into a fic.

I'm usually not one for reading AU fics but the summary had me intrigued, and I wasn't disappointed with the fic. I think you're a really great writer and you should really do another part despite what some people say.

[lulla-belle1208.livejournal.com]

thank you, i'm glad you like it. i personally love it.

i'm going to post the first real part here in a minute

[edhelborna.livejournal.com]

loved it! Does Orlando know that Dom's actually the 'boss dude' [dunno what else to call him lol] of the officers that killed his wive? keep on writing, i'm looking forwards the next chapter!