FIC: All Better (SB/VM, PG-13, 1/1)

[karelian]

Yesterday my beloved minion cinzia got me all angsty and then I had to go write some schmoop to make myself feel better. I blame her for what follows (which is, of course, also dedicated to her with much love and adoration). This is a sequel to "All Right" and it's just as sappy, if not more so, than the first one. I have a sinking suspicion that this may turn into a series.

Disclaimer: This is fiction, never happened, never will.

( All Better )

Comments

[cinzia.livejournal.com]

This gets better and better every time I read it--the sheer intensity of Sean's feelings, turning his world upside down! I love how he's gone from 'huh?' (last night) to this intensity... it shows that the feelings have been there all along, he just never allowed himself to acknowledge their presence. And now that he does, they hit him all at once, and it's so powerful he feels *physically* jolted.

And one of the most beautiful lines ever: At the same time, he's being so fucking nice about it that you want to refute his words and tell him you were an idiot and he can have anything he wants, even the things you can't think about.

I have a sinking suspicion that this may turn into a series.
It better! :)

[karelian]

I love how he's gone from 'huh?' (last night) to this intensity...

Which I am sure is somehow your fault. *g*

If this does turn into a series, am blaming YOU! (Devil getting impatient, believes I am neglecting him...am scared...can I send him to punish you instead of me?)

[cinzia.livejournal.com]

can I send him to punish you instead of me?
Please, by all means--do send the nice gentleman my way. I'm all for martyrdom, y' know. Ahem. ;)

[virginhuntress.livejournal.com]

Oh my god...where did you get those pics for you icon??? wink wink ;)... they're fabulous!!!

[cinzia.livejournal.com]

they're fabulous!!!
They are, aren't they? *beams* I don't know where the actual pics came from (icon was a gift), but Viggo's is from Indian Runner and Sean's from Lady Chatterley.
Good movies, yeah... :)

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[virginhuntress.livejournal.com]

thanks a bunch :)

[savageseraph.livejournal.com]

Few things have the capacity to make me squee just after I've gotten out of bed. Before I've had breakfast.

This fic is one of them.

I loved the sense of working through things, the consequences of the realizations from "All Better."

And the whole paragraph that started with this line, You're not sure, but you think you're the one who finally moves across the distance that separates you, was just fab.

Ummm...more please?

[karelian]

Ummm...more please?

Suspect that is inevitable. Hard to get anything else done with horny, corny men living in my head. Do other people have this problem or is it just me?!

Thanks for the early-morning feedback! *hugs*

[savageseraph.livejournal.com]

Hard to get anything else done with horny, corny men living in my head. Do other people have this problem or is it just me?!

Suspect that it may not be distracting to the world at large, though the issue does seems to be rather prevalent in the corner of that world that I'm living in. ^_^

[msilverstar]

Beautiful, thank you so much. I needed something this sweet this morning.

Lovely writing, will stay with me for while: time has stopped operating in its normal minute-to-minute rhythm and hangs suspended, stretching like chewing gum pulled between teeth and fingers until it finally falls sticky and soft against your lower lip and chin.

[karelian]

Thank you! Hope your morning is going better (gack, it's afternoon already isn't it! We have a foot of snow here and the day is drifting by...)

[msilverstar]

Went with family & friends to SF Peace march. Feel better.

[gotham-syren.livejournal.com]

I didn't know how you'd manage to follow up 'All Right' - which was taut and gorgeous and just a little melancholy - but, *guh*, I think you've done it! Just as wonderful. Or more, even, because we get *this*:

Viggo is right that it seems a little fast, but his lips are warm and firm against yours and then damp and soft around them, swift and urgent, bitter with coffee and sweet with fruit.

::dies::

And the moment that Viggo smiles - I think it made me almost as happy as Sean. I can feel it, just about.

[karelian]

Wow, I don't think anyone has ever called anything I wrote "taut" before! I've given up even aiming for taut. Will settle for "no adverbs dripping off the edges of the pages." Thank you!

[virginhuntress.livejournal.com]

Ok, i figure that i should add to encouraging you to write more of this... your writing is so tense and beautiful, all at the same time....

Will you do it if i beg....???

Plleeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaassssssssseeeeeeeee......squeeee!!!

[karelian]

Am trying to resist begging but can be bribed. *g* Send Viggo to my address -- don't worry about getting him dressed or cleaned up or anything, will take him as-is. I promise fic as soon as I'm finished, uh, asking him polite questions to make sure it's all as realistic as possible...

Thank you!

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[virginhuntress.livejournal.com]

hee hee....YAY!!!!!

Re: hee!

[karelian]

Thank you! This feedback makes me grin and squeal happily to myself! *hugs you*