my first ever fic

[herm42.livejournal.com]

This fic is dust in the wind. :)

Comments

[salixbabylon.livejournal.com]

*g* I like it. I really love the visuals and the grease and the dirt. You did an excellent job of making it naughty and sexy. Oh, and HOT! :)

[kissing-athelas.livejournal.com]

I am actually unable to form any words in my head other than swear words. I will try again when I'm not dying.

[herm42.livejournal.com]

I'm going to take that as a compliment.
I just started on your (epic-like) university fic. Haven't gotten very far yet as life keeps interrupting, but so far I like very much. Had me chuckling from the get-go.

[lisabellex.livejournal.com]

Sorry to butt in. Just wanted to say that Life Begins is one of my favourite domlijahs. Fabulous story. K_A is one of the very best domlijah authors out there. Enjoy!

:D

[kissing-athelas.livejournal.com]

Cheque's in the post. ;)

[lisabellex.livejournal.com]

Pleasure doing business. :)

[kissing-athelas.livejournal.com]

Oh no, it was definately a compliment. Considering I see myself as something vaguely resembling a writer I just suck at feedback. I'm awful. Especially when I really like something. It's like all the words fall out of my brain.

What I really wanted to say about this fic was that I love the really simply done sexiness of it. The fact it's hot, that Elijah watches Dom work, the fact Elijah watches Dom work with a lolly, for christ's sake. There's something so incredibly coy about boys with lollies, it's a marvellous thing.

I know you've pretty much set it in the present, but it has this wonderful 50s/60s feel for me. Elijah comes across in this fic as the bored rich boy who likes to play with the lower class labourer. At least, that's how it plays when I read it. It's fantastic. The whole idea that Dom doesn't want him to get dirty, whereas it's all Elijah cares about. Yeah, there's definitely some class thing going on there...

And yeah, I agree with lisabellex, it definitely has a southern drawl. ;)

I just started on your (epic-like) university fic. Haven't gotten very far yet as life keeps interrupting, but so far I like very much. Had me chuckling from the get-go.

Oh, wow... Thank you, I'm very flattered you'd take the time to read my one and only contribution to the fandom. :) I really hope it doesn't let you down.

[herm42.livejournal.com]

tyvvm. everything you said was exactly what I was going for - at the time. Everybody gave me such great feedback and put so many ideas in my head I decided to keep working on Vintage and see where it takes me. It's gone off in a slightly different direction now...ok a very different direction.

[kissing-athelas.livejournal.com]

I can't wait to read! :)

[sumbitch.livejournal.com]

hell-fuckin'-yeah!

*scurries off to rec*

[-grievousangel.livejournal.com]

Came here at sumbitch's rec, and damn glad I did - that was seriously hot. Nice dream!

to all previous commentors

[herm42.livejournal.com]

thanks v. much! Glad everyone liked.

I admit the dream wasn't as filled out at the ficlet is - but yes it was nice!

[lisabellex.livejournal.com]

This has a lovely rhythm and pace to it. I'm from the UK and your fic spoke to me with a deep southern (USA) accent. I don't know if that's the area you're from or not, but that's how I heard it!

This is a lovely vignette. I very much like the way you use language and description. Your Dom and Elijah are very sexy, very dirty together.

I look forward to reading more of your work!

:D

[herm42.livejournal.com]

thank you. I LOVE detailed feedback. No I'm not from the south. I'm from New England. I find that interesting though. I'll have to reread it and see if I can hear it. I guess all the car talk is kind of a southern US cliche :)

[lisabellex.livejournal.com]

Oh yes, your tale has a definite Tennessee Williams feel to it. I heard such a lovely southern drawl. And it wasn't just associated with the car talk. It danced through the narrative also. It was in the rhythm and pace of the piece. It was very pretty, very consistent.

:D

[herm42.livejournal.com]

*humph*... yay unintended good stuff! :)

[herm42.livejournal.com]

"Lij's ass had two black hand prints, the thumbs pointing right at his abused little hole..."

*Mr. Williams rolls over in grave a few times*
:D

[lisabellex.livejournal.com]

Now, that's making quite an assumption. He might well have thought it charming and maybe even a little titilating. You paint a very pretty picture there, my dear; or should I say, you paint Dominic painting a very pretty picture there!

Am friending you.

:D

[alchemie.livejournal.com]

I also followed the breadcrumbs left by sumbitch. This was hot as hades. *wipes brow* Thank you for the fabulous read!

[herm42.livejournal.com]

yay! I can write pr0n!! *claps*

[zoniduck.livejournal.com]

Here via sumbitch's rec, and she was right. FANTASTIC first effort, really first rate. And I loved the imagery of the dirt from Dom's hands all over Elijah.

It was smokin' hot too.

Hope to see more from you. *g*

[herm42.livejournal.com]

thank you

[travelingcarrot.livejournal.com]

This cannot possibly be your first fic. Noooo. No can be. I thought keyboards spontaneously combusted if you wrote stuff this hawt without warming up to it first.

*orders you back to bed to have more dreams*

[herm42.livejournal.com]

lol.
first fic, but I've been writing for years - just not porn. That's fairly recent. Glad you liked it.

[valiantfan.livejournal.com]

Hot stuff! Loved the idea of the hand print! Hope you intend to write more, 'cos you should.

[karadin.livejournal.com]

Fabulous and hot, and wonderfully detailed, you can feel the heat shimmer, in more ways than one. Thank you!

[libitina]

Where did it go?????

- Everyone at moot (chez queerbitch)

[herm42.livejournal.com]

http://www.livejournal.com/users/herm42/6802.html#cutid1

[libitina]

Thanks


Mmmmmmmm - hot dirty car!sex